The phone ring jars the peaceful nightA shiver runs down the spine in fright..
Who could be calling at this wee hour!
To pick up the phone She dreads, she fears.
The man picks up the phone to hear...
His face contorts in sheer despair.
She doesnt want to listen to the confirmation..
of the dread that has been growing in her abdomen!
She rushes across the seas to reach...
The devastation left behind the cortege.
Amidst muted tears she can only behold
A mass of people, an unwanted crowd.
No more smiling lips or open arms
No more endless questions, patient ears
No more warmth or welcome at the threshold!
No more life, just an eerie silence!
She is in a hurry to reach,
the two pairs of tearful eyes..
To hold them in their grief,
and join them to say goodbye!
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Prompt from Writers Island - The Moment
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16 comments:
was this a personal moment?...I too get very numb if the phone rings in te wee hors it could only mean bad news...
there's just one thing i was unclear about see ure orkut/...
take care...suma
now it really comes through!! :) very nice!!
:( Wish i hadn't read it. It is too real for me right now.
:( :(
Sad moment. Touching.
Absolutely chilling...powerful heartfelt intense moment! I am so familiar with these moments, well done!
Love and peace to you!
Moments like this are terribly sad...and it seems there are many...sorry.
This is sad, so very sad. I am moved by the sentiments, I connect, I understand. I have an ailing father back home in the Philippines battling with cancer in the hospital right now. And I'm here far away from home to afford his medicines and hospital bills. I can imagine how it is to be hearing an unwanted ringing of the phone in the middle of the night. I understand the fear, the anxiety, the sad anticipation.
I wish you well.
~ Jeques
This is very poignant. Sometimes is the things that we may have found irritating like 'endless questions' that we miss most when we lose someone.
what an absolutely heartfelt moment.. a mone t we will all face,, if we have not already,, and you pained it so beautifully.. so full of reality,, life and death.....
Its such moments that will always bring a shiver down our spine....nothing can numb that....
This was so descriptive and touching...
Tragic and beautiful; well-done.
Oh so very final...and real, wish it didnt have to be real but face it we must and heal we must as life goes on. Very nice poem thank you.
Very sad, but well caught.
This one really speaks to me. I live across an ocean from my family, and live in fear of that late night phone call.
Goodness! This made me shiver! What a moment.
Thanks for all your comments.
This was the story of losing my mother. Its been 4 years and this is the first time I have been able to talk about it!!
Thank you all for listening.
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